讀后續(xù)寫需要學生理解文章,并鎖定關鍵信息,合理推測故事的發(fā)展方向,并創(chuàng)造性地完成續(xù)寫。經(jīng)過多年的教學實踐,筆者發(fā)現(xiàn)以問題為導向,有助于培養(yǎng)學生構建情節(jié)的能力。本文以2022年蘇州市某一重點高中月考試卷中的讀后續(xù)寫題為例,主要探究教師如何通過設計問題,幫助學生厘清原文主線、確定續(xù)寫框架并敲定續(xù)寫細節(jié)。
一、設計問題,幫助學生理清原文主線
讀后續(xù)寫基本上都是記敘文,包含時間、地點、人物、情節(jié)等,教師應首先引導學生在第一次閱讀文本時,找出文本的5W+1H(who,where,what,why,when,how),理清原文的主線,這樣才能讓續(xù)寫內(nèi)容盡可能貼近原文故事的發(fā)展趨勢,由此達到情節(jié)協(xié)同。
筆者讓學生閱讀原文,并回答問題:Q1:When did the story happen?Q2:Where were Sammy and his family?Q3:Who were involved?Q4:What did main characters do?Q5:How did the story unfold?Q6:Why was the little girl in the hollow?閱讀文章后,學生簡述故事情節(jié):六月的一天,Sammy和爸爸、弟弟在公園野營,Sammy在瀑布下方的水潭里游泳,游了一會,坐在石頭上休息時,看見一個女孩不幸被卷入瀑布附近的巖石下方的洞里。爸爸喊Sammy去救人。筆者提醒學生注意第三段的一句話“The rapids pushed her into the hollow beneath the rock,hiding her from the crowd above.”說明這個洞比較隱蔽,人群無法看到。
二、設計問題,幫助學生確定續(xù)寫框架
續(xù)寫部分所給的兩段首句,限定了寫作框架,所以教師應該引導學生研讀兩段的首句,找出關鍵詞,關鍵詞有時是新出現(xiàn)的名詞。一般而言,讀后續(xù)寫是通過四句話定框架,即每個段首句引出的第一句話和兩段的末句。引出的第一句話常和段首句是同一主語,體現(xiàn)協(xié)同性,而第一段的末句承上啟下,銜接兩個段落,第二段的末句一般交代故事的結局或升華主題。
筆者讓學生探討,第一段的首句“The ten-year-old took a few seconds to consider the situation.”中出現(xiàn)的新名詞“the situation”指代什么,一些同學認為“the situation”指如何拯救溺水的女孩,而另一些學生認為“the situation”指Sammy在思考成功救出女孩的可能性,筆者肯定這兩種觀點,因為在原文中都可以找到依據(jù)。筆者再讓學生探討,從第二段首句“Soon,someone threw them a swimming board from the bank.”中出現(xiàn)的“them”和新名詞“a swimming board”可獲得哪些信息?學生回答:“them”說明Sammy已和小女孩會合,有人從堤岸處扔游泳浮板,說明Sammy在救援時碰到了困難,再結合常識,一個人扔浮板的力氣是有限的,故浮板是被扔在靠近堤岸處。筆者追問:什么困難導致Sammy呼救呢?學生說:Sammy漸漸體力不支,然后呼救!由此確定第一段末句為“Strength running out,he struggled to swim toward theshore,shouting for help”;這篇續(xù)寫的結局肯定是兩人成功脫險,凸顯的正能量可以是Sammy臨危不懼,故第二段的段末句為“But for Sammy’s bravery,the lit-tle girl might have been drowned”。確定這四句話,便確定了續(xù)寫的框架。
三、設計問題,幫助學生敲定續(xù)寫細節(jié)
學生續(xù)寫時需要使用順向思維和逆向思維,即根據(jù)第二段首句所提供的信息逆推第一段的情節(jié),再根據(jù)第二段首句順推下面的情節(jié),而且情節(jié)發(fā)展基本遵循“沖突——危機——解決”的模式,值得一提的是:情節(jié)的發(fā)展離不開主要人物的動作、語言、情緒等。
筆者根據(jù)第一段的首句和末句,提出的問題如下:Q1:What could the situation refer to?Q2:What did Sammy do first?Q3:When he approached the little girl,what did Sammy do?What was the little girl’s emotion and response?Q4:Did Sammy manage to pull the girl out of the hollow?Q5:How to increase the chance of the girl’s survival?學生經(jīng)過探討,提供的答案歸納如下:The situation refers to how to rescue the drowning girl or whether to rescue her.Sammy first swam to where the little girl was.When approaching the girl,Sammy tried hard to pull the girl from the hollow.The drowning girl was scared and desperate.Sammysuc-ceeded in puling the girl out of the hollow and kept her head above the water.
根據(jù)第二段首句和末句,筆者提出的問題如下:Q1:What did Sammy do when seeing the swimming board?Q2:What use could be made of the swimming board?Q3:Were they safe and sound at last?Q4:How did Dad comment on Sammy’s heroic deed?Q5:How did the crowd respond when witnessing everything?學生通過探討,提供的回答歸納如下:Sammy reached out for the swimming board and laid the little girl on the board.Sammy managed to save the girl,earning him praise from his father and the crowd.
綜上所述,以問題為導向,不僅可以充分調(diào)動學生的學習積極性,培養(yǎng)學生的思維能力,還可以讓學生通過回答問題來組織續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容,并續(xù)寫出和原文一脈相承,情節(jié)連貫的內(nèi)容。
(作者單位:湖北省十堰市車城高級中學)