Dear Jackson，

Im glad to hear youll come to Shijiazhuang to learn Chinese. Chinese is an淤useful language and many foreigners are learning it now. It may be difficult for youbecause its quite different with于English. You have to remember as many Chinesewords as you can. Its important to do some reading and writing， too. You canwatch TV and listen to the radio to practise your listening. You had better to盂communicate with people around you in Chinese. Please ask me if you have anyquestions. Im sure youll learn Chinese well.

Looking forward to seeing you soon in Shijiazhuang.

Yours，

Zheng Hao

河北省阜城縣第四中學(xué)鄭浩

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