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劉秀志 男，山東省汶上縣汶上鎮(zhèn)第二中學(xué)英語教師。在教學(xué)中認(rèn)真鉆研，大膽創(chuàng)新。有多年從教經(jīng)歷，經(jīng)驗豐富。

Keep Our School Clean

Good afternoon， boys and girls！

We are studying in this school. We all are① the owners of the school. Its our duty to keep it clean. Its not good to spit in public places， such as in the schoolyard or in the classroom. We are not supposed to draw pictures on the walls and throw some② litter onto the ground. I think we must make it a rule to keep clean③ in and outside the classroom every day. If everyone can do it like this， Im sure our school will be more beautiful.

Thats all. Thank you！

山東省汶上縣汶上鎮(zhèn)第二中學(xué)九年級六班 王娜

1. 優(yōu)點：

發(fā)言是直接面向聽眾的，要求盡量使用大眾化的語言。作者也正是抓住了這一點，句子簡短明了、要點鮮明、條理清楚，靈活運用學(xué)過的重要句型，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確。盡管個別地方出現(xiàn)錯誤，仍不失為一篇好的習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① all are改為are all。all常用在系動詞的后面，實義動詞的前面。

② some改為any。因為該句為否定句。

③ keep clean改為keep cleaning。keep后接動名詞。

3. 評分：

按中考英語書面表達(dá)滿分15的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得12分。