郭佳鑫

Last summer， I went to Beijing on vacation with my family. The weather was sunny and hot. I saw some flowers along the way. They were beautiful. So we were very happy and excited. The air was very clean. We ate Beijing Roast Duck and Kung Pao Chicken. They were delicious. And we visited the Palace Museum and Tiananmen Square. They were beautiful，too. I liked the Palace Museum very much. Because there were a lot of people there. There were many old literature books and the clothes which the ancient emperors wore at that time. I knew the ancient culture and hardship. I learned a lot of knowledge. I was very happy. I had a great trip.

簡評：

這是一篇敘事的文章，語言流暢，思路清晰，通過所聞所感的真實(shí)描述，表現(xiàn)了小作者熱愛生活，熱愛祖國的高尚情操。語法運(yùn)用正確，但是主次不夠分明。

指導(dǎo)教師： 管德琴