【欄目要求】
1. 將學(xué)生習(xí)作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績; 2. 在應(yīng)該修改的地方劃線并標(biāo)注序號;
3. 根據(jù)所標(biāo)序號進行修改并說明修改的理由; 4. 給學(xué)生習(xí)作點評<優(yōu)點與不足>;
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易艷華 女,畢業(yè)于湖南科技大學(xué),英語教學(xué)十五年,中學(xué)一級教師,主導(dǎo)雙語教學(xué),系骨干教師和學(xué)科帶頭人,主持湖南省永州市教改課題《中學(xué)生英語故事閱讀與寫作技能開發(fā)研究》,已有多篇論文在省級期刊上發(fā)表并獲獎,并輔導(dǎo)學(xué)生多次獲大獎。現(xiàn)任教于湖南省永州市冷水灘區(qū)竹山橋?qū)W校。
My Pet
Do you have a pet? What kind of pet do you like?
I like cat. My mother bought a small cat for me. It is very lovely. Her eyes are big and she is quiet. When I do my homework, she always sits on the table. She likes eating fish. Sometimes I feed her fish, and sometimes I feed her rice. And she never cry①. One day, when I was doing my homework, my pet looked at me.
“Hello, what are you doing, Tina?” asked Kitty. Kitty is my cats name and Tina is my English name.
“I am doing my homework,” I answered her. “Are you hungry now?”
“Yes, I want to eat a piece of fish,” said Kitty.
“I am sorry. Today I can not give you a piece of fish,”
“Why? You know, I like eating fish, dont you?” Kitty looked at me quiet②.
“Because I dont have some③ fish now. Could you have fish tomorrow?” I asked her.
“OK. Thank you!” said kitty.
湖南省永州市冷水灘區(qū)竹山橋?qū)W校七(61)班 朱雄志
1. 優(yōu)點:
這是一篇相當(dāng)不錯的故事小作文。小作者描寫了自己的寵物貓,童話般的語言讓人感到非常親切,寫出了小作者和寵物貓Kitty之間深厚的感情。人與貓的對話是作文的亮點,難能可貴。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①cry改為cries。主語是第三人稱單數(shù),在一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)里,動詞要用相應(yīng)的第三人稱單數(shù)形式。
②quiet改為quietly。quiet是形容詞,形容詞不能修飾動詞look,需要把形容詞變?yōu)楦痹~來修飾動詞,需要在quiet后加ly變?yōu)楦痹~quietly。
③some改為any。原句為否定句。some用于肯定句,any用于否定句。
3. 評分:
按湖南省永州市中考英語作文滿分10分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn),本文修改前可得9分。