姜經(jīng)志

一、習(xí)作要求：

父母是孩子的啟蒙者。如何與孩子相處，是父母要認(rèn)真思考的一個(gè)問題；作為孩子，尤其要學(xué)會(huì)與父母和諧相處、經(jīng)常溝通。在你的日常生活中，你是如何與父母相處的？請以Parents—My Best Friends為題，寫一篇80詞左右的短文。

二、學(xué)生習(xí)作：

Parents-My Best Friends

All the parents love their children. So do my parents. They are not only my parents but also my best friends in my life.

My parents are both teachers. They are always busy with their work at school all day. So they have little time to take care of me. I got a chance to learn doing① many kinds of things by myself when I was quite young， such like② dressing， riding a bike， reading and cooking.

Later my parents bought me a computer， and I used it to surf the Internet and study English. Once I played computer games for a whole day and forgot else everything③. I was still playing even when my father stood behind me for half an hour. He didnt punish me for what I did. Instead， he took a long walk with me in the evening and told me what I should do and what I should not do. From then on， I decided to put up④ the bad habit.

I love my parents though they have little time to be with me. We are getting on well with each other because we believe in each other and love each other.

（安徽省濉溪縣百善中心學(xué)校九（1）班 王濤）

點(diǎn)評(píng)

許多父母由于和孩子的溝通不當(dāng)，教育方法落后，導(dǎo)致和孩子關(guān)系緊張；還有一些孩子不懂父母的恩情，不懂得用出色的成績?nèi)セ貓?bào)他們。本文的小作者通過講述與父母之間發(fā)生的一件小事，告訴人們教育子女要講究方法。只有平等地和孩子相處、作孩子的朋友，才能教育好孩子。本文語言流暢、敘述條理清楚、表達(dá)感情真摯，雖有一些語法錯(cuò)誤，但仍不失為一篇佳作。

【修改之處】

① doing改為to do。learn 后應(yīng)接動(dòng)詞不定式，即learn to do sth.，意為“學(xué)做某事”。

② like改為as。such as意為“例如”，用來列舉事物。

③ else everything改為everything else。形容詞修飾不定代詞時(shí)，要把形容詞放在不定代詞的后面。

④ put up改為give up?！胺艞墶睉?yīng)用give up。

【評(píng)分檔次】

按中考英語作文滿分20分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得18分。