主" 持" 人：謝建民（正高級教師，江蘇省特級教師）

本期撰稿：江蘇省無錫市謝建民名師工作室成員章彪（無錫市新吳區(qū)泰伯實驗中學）

And so my life went on. Every month I learnt to do or to make something new， but I also had troubles along the way. Once there was a terrible storm with heavy rain. The roof of my cave fell in， and nearly killed me！ I had to build it up again with many pieces of wood.

I had a lot of food now. I cooked it over a fire or dried it under the sun. So I always had enough meat during the rainy months when I could not go out with a gun. I even learnt to make pots to store my food. But my goal was to make a harder， stronger pot-a pot that would not break in a fire. I tried many times， but I could not make it until one day I was lucky. I made some new pots and put them in a very hot fire. They changed colour but remained unbroken. I left them there for many hours， and when they had cooled down， I found that they had become hard and strong. That night I was very happy， as I had hot water for the first time on the island.

By then， I also had my own bread. That was lucky， too. One day I found a little bag. We used it on the ship to store the chickens’ food. There was still some of the food in the bag， and I dropped some of it onto the ground. A month later， I saw something bright green there， and after six months， I had a small cornfield. I was very excited. Perhaps now， I could finally bake my own bread！

It was easier said than done. It is still a lot of work to make bread from corn. Many people eat bread， but how many can take corn from a field and make bread out of it without help？ I had to learn and to make many new things， and it took me a year before I cooked and ate my first bread.

1. What is the passage mainly about？

2. How should we deal with the problems in our life？

生活就像一場漫長的旅程，我們在其中不斷前行、學習、成長。在這個過程中，總有一些人、一些事照亮我們前行的道路，引導我們追求更好的自己。請你寫一篇文章，談談自己成長中的變化，以及這個變化對你的意義。

I like writing because it helps me grow.

I was very shy when I was young. I am afraid of speaking in front of others. So no one would make friends with me.

Writing helped me to be a better man. It helped me find my way of expressing myself. I can write freely and share my thoughts and feelings with my parents and my friends this way. I joined the Writing Club， and I made lots of friends there.

建議進一步闡述寫作的意義來表明文章寫作意圖。

建議通過使用連詞的方式增強文章的層次性。

建議使用復合句式增強語言的豐富性。

文章缺少結(jié)束語。

Through my life， becoming a writer has always been my dream. It not only enriches my life but also helps me grow.

I used to be a shy person who always felt uncomfortable around others. I had difficulty speaking in front of others， let alone making friend with them. However， things changed when I discovered my true love for writing. It became my voice which helped me express my thoughts and emotions freely. In this way， I was able to make some friends who shared the same interest.

Writing has changed my life for the better. I was no longer the shy little boy I used to be. Writing has opened up many new doors of opportunity for me and has shaped me into the person I am today.

升格文內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。首段開門見山，闡述了寫作對我的意義和作用。第二段從過去的狀態(tài)、發(fā)生的變化兩個方面，介紹了寫作幫助自己成長的具體情況。結(jié)語部分再次點題，抒發(fā)了“寫作為我打開了許多新的大門，使我成為今天的我”的感悟。升格文能運用“完成時態(tài)”“定語從句”等復雜結(jié)構(gòu)，讓文章語言有了層次感。

“故天將降大任于是人也，必先苦其心志，勞其筋骨，餓其體膚，空乏其身?！崩щy是每個人都需要克服和勇敢面對的。請圍繞“Dealing with problems”這一話題，用英文進行寫作。

I have problems learning English.

Spoken English is the most difficult problem for me. I am afraid to speak in class，because I think my classmates might laugh at me. Listening is another problem. It isn’t easy for me to understand the teacher. I find remembering the words a hard job， because Chinese is different from English.

Though there are many problems in English learning， I believe that I can do it well if I pay more attention to it.

可以再強調(diào)英語是一門重要的課程，突出問題的嚴峻性。

羅列問題時使用連詞或者序數(shù)詞，可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)更為清晰。

可以具體談談解決問題的舉措，使得文章更全面、更有條理。

English has become an important language in our daily lives， making it a crucial course for us.

I have had many difficulties since I started to learn English. Since I’m always quiet and shy， I had a hard time speaking English in front of others at the very beginning. My poor memory also posed additional difficulties when I decided to enlarge my vocabulary. I find it difficult to remember the meaning of words and their correct usage in sentences.

I have spared no efforts in overcoming these difficulties and finally succeeded. For example， I used flashcards to memorize new words and their meanings. I also tried to use new words in sentences and practice spoken English with native English speakers to improve my pronunciation and fluency.

Overall， I’ll keep working hard to improve my English skills and will continue to try my best to overcome all the problems in the process.

升格文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，內(nèi)容豐富。開篇表明了英語的重要性，切入主題。隨后，小作者具體分析了自己在英語學習中的問題，探討了解決問題的方法，使得文章具有條理性。小作者能合理運用連詞、復雜句，增強了文章的嚴謹性和層次感。