張祖平 男，80后英語教師，就職于浙江省紹興市樹人中學，愛好閱讀、翻譯和寫作。在英語教學中，注重分層教學，尤其善于激勵英語基礎薄弱的學生，用他們的興趣愛好引導他們愉快地閱讀。自主研發(fā)的“E飛英語口語考試小程序”榮獲2018年紹興市教師自制教具比賽一等獎。

Hello， everyone！

The Health Club has just made a survey about the habits of our students. Today we are going to share the results. Many of the students by bike or walk to school①. They dont eat snacks for② breakfast and lunch. They do sports a lot③. So they are very healthy.

But some of the students take their parents car④ to school. They eat lots of meat. And they never do sports so theyre fat and heavy.

I think its not difficult to have good habits. Healthy food and enough sleep are both important for us because we are grow⑤ up.

浙江省紹興市樹人中學初一（5）班 曾江濤

1. 優(yōu)點：

本文緊扣要點，語言簡潔，能準確使用單數和復數及相應的代詞。全文脈絡清晰，觀點明確。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①此句建議改為：Most students go to school by bike or on foot.或Most students ride bikes or walk to school. 連詞or連接的應該是并列結構，原句中by bike并非動詞短語，而是介詞短語。另外，“大部分學生”應該用most students。

②“兩餐之間”用between...and結構，也就是把for改為between。

③此句建議改為：They do a lot of exercise. 讀起來更流暢。

④此句中人和車都是復數，并且有所屬關系，應該用上名詞所有格結構parents cars。

⑤在英語中，be動詞后面是不能直接跟動詞原形的，應該把grow改為growing，這樣就變成了現在進行時結構，意為“我們正在成長”。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分10分的評分標準，本文修改前可得6分。