王夢

I had an interesting summer vacation. My parents and I went to Sanya. We stayed there for three days. On the first day ，we arrived there. It was rainy so I had to stay at the hotel. But the next day was sunny. My parents and I went to the beach. The air was so clean and the weather was hot. There were many people. Some children played with sand. Some people lay in the sun and enjoyed the sunshine. We went paragliding on the beach. In the afternoon， I picked up some shells. They were so beautiful. On the third day， we went shopping and bought some souvenirs. We had a good time. I will never forget the days in Sanya.

簡評： 文章時態(tài)用得很準(zhǔn)確，利用一般過去時描述假期的生活，并且結(jié)尾用將來時的句子I will never forget the days in Sanya.來抒發(fā)自己的感受，說明作者對時態(tài)掌握得很好。文章結(jié)構(gòu)較完整，但在寫文章時應(yīng)避免僅用一兩種句型，而要根據(jù)實際情況靈活運(yùn)用所學(xué)的各種句式，使文章有聲有色。

（指導(dǎo)教師：馬艷紅）