張 東
原文:
Food
I like bananas. For breakfast, I like bananas, eggs and milks1. I like any2 rice, vegetables and bananas. For dinner, I also like bananas and hamburgers. And3 my young sister dont4 like them. She like5 meat, so she is very fat.
分析:本文條理清晰、意思連貫地介紹了自己一日三餐的飲食習慣,而且還特別指出“香蕉”是自己的最愛,有重點,但也有幾處錯誤:
1. milk為不可數名詞,不能在其后加s。
2. any用于疑問句、否定句中,如I dont have any books, 而some用于肯定句或表請求的疑問句中,如Could you give me some rice?
3. 根據后面對like 的否定,得知此句與上句的意思不同,應用表示轉折的連詞but而不用表示并列的連詞and。
4. 要否定實義動詞like,則需借助dont或doesnt, my young sister為第三人稱單數,所以應該用doesnt。
5. 主語she為第三人稱單數,謂語動詞也需用第三人稱單數形式,即likes。
改正:
Food
I like bananas. For breakfast, I like bananas, eggs and milk. I like some rice, vegetables and bananas. For dinner, I also like bananas and hamburgers. But my young sister doesnt like them. She likes meat, so she is very fat.
(指導教師:鄭一敏)