《普通高中英語(yǔ)課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)(2020年修訂版)》學(xué)業(yè)質(zhì)量水平二要求高中學(xué)生能在書(shū)面表達(dá)中有條理地描述自己或他人的經(jīng)歷,闡述觀點(diǎn),表達(dá)情感態(tài)度,描述事件發(fā)生、發(fā)展的過(guò)程,續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇,選擇體現(xiàn)邏輯關(guān)聯(lián)性的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu),確切表達(dá)意思。下面,筆者以2024年高考英語(yǔ)全國(guó)卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題為例,探討在寫(xiě)作教學(xué)過(guò)程中,如何結(jié)合閱讀文本分析設(shè)計(jì)層層鋪墊的問(wèn)題鏈來(lái)引領(lǐng)學(xué)生進(jìn)行讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)續(xù)文的高效寫(xiě)作。
一、閱讀部分的文本分析
2024年高考英語(yǔ)全國(guó)卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)閱讀文本內(nèi)容分析:“我”原計(jì)劃飛往Vienna(維也納),隨后搭乘大巴去Prague(布拉格)參加會(huì)議。但由于遭遇暴風(fēng)雨,航班延誤了一個(gè)半小時(shí),在最后一班開(kāi)往Prague的大巴出發(fā)前30分鐘才抵達(dá)Vienna。一下飛機(jī),我慌忙跳上第一輛出租車(chē),與司機(jī)Gunter在溝通上大費(fèi)周折后,終于到達(dá)車(chē)站卻發(fā)現(xiàn)自己既沒(méi)有帶現(xiàn)金,也無(wú)法刷銀行卡,就連候車(chē)大廳入口處的自動(dòng)取款機(jī)也顯示機(jī)器故障。眼看著排隊(duì)上車(chē)的人越來(lái)越少,最后一班車(chē)馬上就要開(kāi)走,我心急如焚。
依據(jù)第一段段首句:I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.以及第二段段首句:Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.結(jié)合“問(wèn)題鏈”形式引導(dǎo)學(xué)生來(lái)進(jìn)行合理的情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)。
故事人物的設(shè)定:“我”努力工作,遇事比較冷靜,遇問(wèn)題想辦法解決;司機(jī)Gunter話語(yǔ)不多,但友善、熱心助人。
人性的自然表現(xiàn):“我”看到排隊(duì)上車(chē)的人越來(lái)越少,最后一班車(chē)就要開(kāi)走時(shí)的心急如焚,請(qǐng)求Gunter的幫助,對(duì)Gunter的無(wú)私幫助的表達(dá)感激之情;Gunter聽(tīng)到我說(shuō)取款機(jī)故障時(shí)的失望和驚訝,對(duì)我的守信表示高興和欣慰,拒絕我多付他的錢(qián)卻愿意接受我為他買(mǎi)的咖啡或者啤酒,既是他慷慨善良的表現(xiàn)又是對(duì)我信守承諾的肯定。
故事發(fā)展的因果規(guī)律:Gunter對(duì)我的幫助與信任使我順利到達(dá)Prague參加會(huì)議;對(duì)我影響很大,使我對(duì)人性有了新的認(rèn)識(shí),充滿了信心。
故事的主題意義:善良、慷慨、信任、關(guān)心他人、我對(duì)人性的新理解。
順理成章而又比較圓滿的故事結(jié)局:司機(jī)Gunter同意“我”四天之后再付車(chē)費(fèi),使“我”順利坐上最后一班到Prague的班車(chē);“我”能夠遵守承諾,四天后如約付車(chē)費(fèi),“我”對(duì)Gunter的慷慨心懷感激。
寫(xiě)作線索(Writing Clues):第一段:Gunter 聽(tīng)到“我”的壞消息后的反應(yīng)→我對(duì)這事的反應(yīng)→“我”如何向Gunter解釋這事并請(qǐng)求他同意我四天后再給他付車(chē)費(fèi)→Gunter同意我的建議并交換電話號(hào)碼→我順利坐上最后一班車(chē)。
第二段:Gunter 接到“我”電話時(shí)的反應(yīng)→“我們”敲定見(jiàn)面地點(diǎn)以及見(jiàn)面后雙方的反應(yīng)→“我”兌現(xiàn)諾言→這事促成了“我們”的友誼→正是GuESH2toGkx9kdYUDz5ipnYQ==nter老師的慷慨幫助與信任使“我”對(duì)人性充滿了信心。
二、讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)教學(xué)問(wèn)題鏈的設(shè)計(jì)原則與實(shí)踐
有效的“問(wèn)題鏈”能夠幫助學(xué)生梳理讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的寫(xiě)作線索、明晰故事情節(jié)發(fā)展,在設(shè)計(jì)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)問(wèn)題鏈時(shí)要注意以下八點(diǎn)原則:第一、問(wèn)題能巧妙設(shè)置續(xù)寫(xiě)故事所需的情境,如What was the deal? What was the news about?等。第二、問(wèn)題能啟發(fā)對(duì)句意的理解如What did sb.think of...?How did he understand “harmony”?等。第三、問(wèn)題能推動(dòng)故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展如What happened to sb.? What and Why did sb.do sth? How did I explain Gunter to delay paying?等。第四、問(wèn)題能厘清故事中的人物關(guān)系如Who was...? Why did sb.do so? What made sb.do...?第五、問(wèn)題能凸顯故事中的人物性格。第六、問(wèn)題能顯示故事中的背景環(huán)境如Where would be the best place for the meeting? What was the environment/ scenery of the campsite?等。第七、問(wèn)題能揭示故事中的人物的心理活動(dòng)如How did sb.feel? What was one’s feelings?等。第八、問(wèn)題能體現(xiàn)故事主題。
續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段:How did Gunter react to the bad news?How did I feel?How did I explain Gunter to delay paying?What was the deal?How did Gunter react to my suggestion?How did I feel?What did I do then?續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段:How did Gunter react to my calling him?Where would we meet?What did Gunter and I do and say when we met again?What was my feelings?What did I learn from the experience?What effect did the experience have on me?
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