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石繼忠 男，1989年參加工作，中學高級教師、濟寧市骨干教師、市級教學能手，在多年的英語教學工作中，積累了豐富的教學經(jīng)驗，形成了自己獨特的教學方法;從教以來一直負責初中畢業(yè)班的教學工作，在歷年的中考中，所執(zhí)教的班級都取得了優(yōu)異的成績，受到學校和社會各界的一致好評;曾先后在省級、國家級報刊發(fā)表論文一百多篇，現(xiàn)擔任《英語周報》《英語輔導報》《學生英語報》《英語畫刊》《英語園地》等多家報刊的特約編輯。

Everyone has his or her own hobby. Collection is the one in which many people are interesting①. My hobby is collecting coins of different nations.

I collect coins because I treasure them as the works of art. Most coins have a head portrait cast on the front side of it， such as American coins with the portraits of George Washington， Abraham Lincoln， British coins with Elizabeth II， and some others② people who were famous in history. Some coins have the designs of buildings， animals and plants.

I collect coins also because I like the process of collection. A long period of time is needed in gathering one nations whole set of coins. It is very difficult of③ me to find the very coin I want. Sometimes I obtained a coin but I didnt know which nation it came from， I must therefore look around for books or ask some friends. How happy I was when I finally found its value.

I have accumulated a great deal of knowledges④ about the history and culture of different nations from these small coins. The coins will be my spiritual wealth in my lifetime.

山東梁山楊營中學九年級（4）班 高翔

1. 優(yōu)點：

這篇文章結構合理，體現(xiàn)了形式和內(nèi)容的統(tǒng)一。每段各有重點，但始終不離主題。另外，準確的詞語表達和句型的多樣化也為文章增添了不少色彩。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①interesting改為interested。interesting用來形容事物，interested用來形容人。

②others去掉s。這里要用形容詞other來修飾后面的people。

③of改為for，此處意為“對……來說……”。

④knowledges去掉s。knowledge為不可數(shù)名詞。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改后可得12分。