安徽 吳安運(yùn)

★指點(diǎn)迷津

介紹某個(gè)人的情況，即為人物介紹。在學(xué)習(xí)、工作和生活中，常常要介紹、推銷(xiāo)自己或宣傳他人，這都需要作人物介紹。

寫(xiě)人物介紹，首先要全面了解這個(gè)人，然后根據(jù)需要選取寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容。簡(jiǎn)明扼要且突出重點(diǎn)地去介紹，力求真實(shí)準(zhǔn)確，恰如其分。人物介紹一般包括出生年月、主要經(jīng)歷、事跡成就和影響與評(píng)價(jià)等內(nèi)容。人物介紹往往是從外形到性格，或從一般經(jīng)歷到創(chuàng)造性的貢獻(xiàn)，最后常有結(jié)論性的評(píng)語(yǔ)。寫(xiě)人物介紹的英語(yǔ)作文時(shí)，經(jīng)常會(huì)用到以下詞匯：

身份簡(jiǎn)歷：player“運(yùn)動(dòng)員”；pop singer“流行歌手”；movie star“電影明星”；comic star“笑星”；actor/actress“男演員/女演員”；writer“作家”；hero“英雄”；during“在……期間”；graduate“畢業(yè)”；come from“來(lái)自于”；be born in“出生于”；die of“死于……”；make money“掙錢(qián)”；make a living“謀生”；a poor family“一個(gè)貧窮的家庭”；be interested in...“對(duì)……感興趣”；try one's best to do“盡力做……”；live a...life“過(guò)著……的生活”；start to do“開(kāi)始做”；with the help of...“在……的幫助下”；in life“在一生中”

影響評(píng)價(jià)：well-known“著名的”；be famous for...“以……著名”；great“偉大的”；unforgettable“難忘的”；in history“歷史上”；be popular with“受歡迎”；be kind to...“對(duì)……充滿(mǎn)愛(ài)心”；win the prize“獲得獎(jiǎng)勵(lì)”；strong will“堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志”；ready to help others“樂(lè)于助人”

★寫(xiě)作模板

【模板】1

第一段：總說(shuō)。例如：My name is...I would like to...

第二段：具體介紹個(gè)人情況。例如：I was born in...I am good at...Besides,I show...Also,I enjoy...

第三段：結(jié)尾，進(jìn)行評(píng)價(jià)。例如：I look forward to...

【模板】2

My name is______.I come from______.I am______years old.I am a______girl/boy.I am fond of______.In a word,______.

【模板】3

______was born on______in______.He/She is a______.He/She is______.He/She likes______.

★典例分析1

人的一生中會(huì)遇到很多的人，給你留下印象最深的人是誰(shuí)呢？請(qǐng)以“A person I will never forget”為題，寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文。

寫(xiě)作要求：

1.短文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括人物的外貌、性格、愛(ài)好和使你難忘之處等；

2.詞數(shù)80左右。

【題目解讀】

這是一篇描寫(xiě)人物形象的作文，雖然題目已給出，開(kāi)放性卻非常大，自由度比較高。學(xué)生在有限的時(shí)間內(nèi)要做的工作就非常多：對(duì)內(nèi)容進(jìn)行構(gòu)思，對(duì)材料進(jìn)行篩選，語(yǔ)言如何組織，中心怎樣提出等。這些對(duì)學(xué)生來(lái)說(shuō)都是非常大的挑戰(zhàn)。

應(yīng)對(duì)此類(lèi)文章，必須認(rèn)真理解題目，抓住有限信息，找準(zhǔn)具體的實(shí)例來(lái)反映主題，從而進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作。本文的大致結(jié)構(gòu)：引出主人公——外貌、性格、愛(ài)好描寫(xiě)——難忘的特別之處。

注意：應(yīng)以第一人稱(chēng)和第三人稱(chēng)進(jìn)行習(xí)作；時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主；語(yǔ)言的過(guò)渡要靈活、生動(dòng)與連貫?！炯炎髻p析】

A person I will never forget

The person I will never forget is Miss Wang,my junior high school English teacher.①She was tall and nice with long hair.She is also active because she is fond of playing tennis,traveling and listening to music.② In addition,Miss Wang is kind and responsible.③At first,no matter how hard I tried,I couldn't do well in English.④It was Miss Wang who gave me a hand in time.⑤And my English has improved a lot now.

How lucky I am a student of Miss Wang!⑥

亮點(diǎn)分析：本文層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，發(fā)揮合理。首先點(diǎn)題，然后描述細(xì)節(jié)，最后歸納。復(fù)合句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句的多處使用，不但使人物形象栩栩如生，而且讓文章亮點(diǎn)倍出，風(fēng)采非凡。

①文章開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，直奔主題，作者充分利用題目的提示，出色地完成了文章的導(dǎo)入。不但使用了定語(yǔ)從句，還用了一個(gè)同位語(yǔ)來(lái)做解釋?zhuān)梢?jiàn)作者深厚的語(yǔ)言功底。

②用了一個(gè)復(fù)合句，讓讀者明白了一個(gè)道理：一個(gè)人的性格與愛(ài)好是緊密相連的。原因狀語(yǔ)從句中be fond of使用準(zhǔn)確、到位。

③responsible的使用間接地起到了承上啟下的作用——正是因?yàn)樗呢?fù)責(zé)任才引出接下來(lái)的事情。

④no matter how引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句的出現(xiàn)，充分顯示了語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的豐富性。

⑤強(qiáng)調(diào)句的使用更是文章點(diǎn)睛之筆，展現(xiàn)了作者超強(qiáng)的寫(xiě)作功底。

⑥最后作者用感嘆句進(jìn)行總結(jié)、點(diǎn)題，給全文畫(huà)上一個(gè)圓滿(mǎn)的句號(hào)。

【參考范文】

The person I'll never forget is my English teacher.He's a tall man with thick glasses.He likes sports and often plays football and basketball with us.He's humorous and always makes his classes lively and interesting.He's kind but is strict with us.He never allows us to pretend that we know what we don't know.He often tells us that it's no use memorizing new words without understanding.My English has greatly improved with his help.

★典例分析2

用微笑播撒陽(yáng)光，用行動(dòng)踐行夢(mèng)想，用一種無(wú)形的精神力量感染著身邊的每一個(gè)人，為同學(xué)們樹(shù)立一個(gè)個(gè)積極向上的榜樣——這就是“陽(yáng)光少年”。

某中學(xué)自開(kāi)展“向陽(yáng)光少年學(xué)習(xí)”的活動(dòng)以來(lái)，先后涌現(xiàn)出了許許多多的“陽(yáng)光少年”。請(qǐng)你以“A sunshine teenager”為題寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，介紹一位你身邊的“陽(yáng)光少年”（ Xiao Hui）。

要點(diǎn)提示：

1.誠(chéng)實(shí)善良、團(tuán)結(jié)友愛(ài)、樂(lè)于助人；

2.熱情、活潑、開(kāi)朗、樂(lè)觀向上；

3.熱愛(ài)勞動(dòng)、不怕困難、心懷感恩，積極為父母、師長(zhǎng)分憂(yōu)；

4.勤奮好學(xué)，積極參加各種文體活動(dòng)。

參考詞匯：

friendly,be ready,warm－h(huán)earted,outgoing,active,housework,be afraid,share,take an active part in，share...with...

寫(xiě)作要求：

1.內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言流暢，不要逐句翻譯提示內(nèi)容；

2.詞數(shù)不少于80（開(kāi)頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總數(shù)）。

A sunshine teenager

Since our school started the activity“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”,___________________________________________________________________________________________________,Xiao Hui is a good example for us to learn from.

【題目解讀】

從所給素材可看出，本文是一篇記敘文。題目要求根據(jù)提示介紹一位“陽(yáng)光少年”，還給出了參考詞匯，不需要考生再去另外發(fā)揮。但要注意，所給的漢語(yǔ)提示都無(wú)主語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)切忌寫(xiě)出沒(méi)有主語(yǔ)的英語(yǔ)句子。提綱要點(diǎn)很多，寫(xiě)作中容易寫(xiě)出較呆板的千篇一律的He is...或She is...等句子。我們應(yīng)靈活使用各種句子結(jié)構(gòu)，同時(shí)語(yǔ)言表達(dá)要準(zhǔn)確、流暢。

【寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)】

1.開(kāi)場(chǎng)呈現(xiàn)背景信息，自我介紹，引入話(huà)題；

2.介紹Xiao Hui的相關(guān)情況，即提示信息的1～4條；

3.總結(jié)全文，再次說(shuō)明要向Xiao Hui學(xué)習(xí)。

特別提醒：本文屬于人物介紹的記敘文，通篇應(yīng)該以第三人稱(chēng)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。在敘述各要點(diǎn)時(shí)，盡量避免使用單一的句式，注意充分利用所給的參考詞匯。

【佳作賞析】

A sunshine teenager

Since our school started the activity“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”,we have seen a lot of such students.①Today I'll introduce one of them to you,whose name is Xiao Hui.

Xiao Hui is always kind and honest to everyone around him.He is so friendly and ready to help others that we all like to make friends with him.② Besides,as a warm-hearted and outgoing teenager,he is active in his daily life,and often shares the housework with his parents.③He also helps to take care of the old when they're in trouble.As a student,he always works hard at his lessons,and he is also active in many kinds of sports after school.④He has joined some clubs like the music club and the art one.

As a sunshine teenager,Xiao Hui is a good example for us to learn from.⑤

亮點(diǎn)分析：本習(xí)作圍繞提示的要點(diǎn)，首先總體交代背景信息，然后逐條敘述，最后總結(jié)。在敘述中，注意恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用介詞短語(yǔ)、過(guò)渡性詞語(yǔ)和狀語(yǔ)從句等，充分展示了英語(yǔ)詞匯和句型的魅力，是一篇不可多得的優(yōu)秀作文。

①談到學(xué)校開(kāi)展的活動(dòng)，以及身邊出現(xiàn)的變化，內(nèi)容環(huán)環(huán)緊扣，敘述有條理。

②本句把提示信息中松散的要點(diǎn)結(jié)合在一起，“so...that+狀語(yǔ)從句”、短語(yǔ)be ready to do和make friends with的使用更體現(xiàn)出詞匯的豐富多彩。

③本句用besides作為過(guò)渡詞，以as構(gòu)成的介詞短語(yǔ)來(lái)羅列要點(diǎn)，避免了句式的單一。

④本句講到主人公勤奮好學(xué)并且積極參加各種活動(dòng)，表達(dá)十分準(zhǔn)確。

⑤總結(jié)全文，回應(yīng)主題，使全文成為一個(gè)整體，從而起到了畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。

【參考范文】

Hello!My name is Xiao Ming.I'm studying in No.1 Middle School.Our school had an activity called“Learn from Sunshine Teenagers”.From then on,there are many sunshine teenagerscoming out around us.

Xiao Hui is one of them.He is honest and kind.He gets on well with others.He is always ready to not only help others but also go to the old people's home to do something for the old.He reads newspapers for them,cleans their rooms and washes their clothes.Also he is warm-hearted,active and outgoing.He always shares all kinds of his parents'housework,like doing the dishes,sweeping the floor and making dinner.He is never afraid of difficulties.He works very hard and likes reading.And he takes an active part in all kinds of sports.After school,he plays football with his teammates.And he joins the school clubs like the music club,the art club and the chess one.He learns a lot from his activities.

Xiao Hui is a good sunshine teenager.I should learn from him.

★小試牛刀

母愛(ài)情深，母愛(ài)無(wú)價(jià)。學(xué)會(huì)感恩，學(xué)會(huì)回報(bào)。某網(wǎng)站舉辦了以“My mother”為題的英語(yǔ)征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)思維導(dǎo)圖提供的信息寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，介紹母親和你們之間的真情故事。

具體要求：

1.短文應(yīng)包括導(dǎo)圖中的全部信息，做到條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明；

2.詞數(shù)不少于80，開(kāi)頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

My mother

We need love.We also need to love.The person I love most is my mother.