作者：高2018級（2）班 趙倩儼

指導老師：應 斌

An Introduction to Luo Xuejuan

作者：高2018級（2）班 趙倩儼

指導老師：應 斌

牛人小記

第21屆全國青少年外語能力交流展示活動重慶賽區(qū)一等獎

Luo Xuejuan, nicknamed “Luoluo,” is a 23-year-old female from Zhejiang Province, who announced her retirement due to health problems, and is going to Peking University for further study.

When it comes to her experience as an outstanding swimmer, she has devoted herself to swimming since she was young, showing an extraordinary talent in 2000. Three years later, her diligence[勤奮], persistence[堅持]and genius[天賦]eventually paid off—three gold medals at the Barcelona World Championships. Besides, she broke the world record in 2004, becoming the champion of swimming at the Athens Olympics.

It is Luo Xuejuan who has taught us a lesson that “no pains, no gains.” And we should embark upon[開始]a new journey instead of complaining when we are confronted with[面臨]obstacles[障礙]and challenges in life. All in all, she is not only a great swimmer, but also a good example worth being followed.

老師點評：這是一篇介紹人物的課后習作。文章采用典型的“三段式”結(jié)構(gòu)：第一段陳述羅雪娟的基本信息，第二段描述她的經(jīng)歷和成就，第三段是作者對羅雪娟的評價。這篇習作最大的特點是作者在文中很恰當?shù)剡\用了定語從句、時間狀語從句、強調(diào)句等豐富句式，體現(xiàn)出作者較強的英語語言運用能力。