陳傳光

This years summer holiday was the most unforgettable. I spent fifteen days at my grandparents home in the countryside.

Every morning， I went to the field to help my grandparents do farm work after have① breakfast. I learned a lot of agricultural knowledge from them. In the afternoon， I usually spent most of my time on the hill. My new friends and I ran after each other， picked fresh fruits and catch② butterflies together. There was always so many③ fun.

Sometimes I went to swim in the river in the village. The water in it was quite clear. In the evening， I often helped the little kids in the neighborhood at④ their lessons. I was patient but strict with them， just liked a real teacher. Now， I really miss them very much. I hope I could go back there again next summer holiday.

江蘇省連云港市贛榆區(qū)羅陽中學八（1）班 王冬冬

1. 優(yōu)點：

本文是一篇記敘文。小作者回憶自己在祖父母家里過暑假的難忘經歷。文章按照時間順序，描述了她豐富多彩的鄉(xiāng)下生活，并表達對農村生活的熱愛。整篇文章文字流暢、用詞得當，是一篇不錯的學生習作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① have改為having。after是介詞，介詞后接動詞的-ing形式；

② catch改為caught。結合上下文，此處應使用一般過去時；

③ many改為much。many只能修飾可數名詞的復數，much只能修飾不可數名詞，fun是不可數名詞；

④ at改為with。help sb. with sth.是固定結構，意為“在某方面幫助某人”。

3. 評分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標準，本文修改前可得23分。