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As we know， water is very important for us. It is reported that the water is only three-tenths of water is fresh water， only a little water to drink. We cant live without water. We need to drink water every day and the food we eat needs water， too. We notice water is wasted seriously.

So， we should save the water and protect the water. We should use little water when we need to use it. For example， I dont use too much water when I am washing my face or having a bath. When we dont use the water， we should turn off the taps and so on. Id like to tell you： “we cant leave water. if there is no water， it is no life. ”

【簡評】水是人類賴以生存和發(fā)展的重要資源之一，是不可缺少、不可代替的特殊資源。在學(xué)生的觀念中，節(jié)約用水是每個學(xué)生、公民都應(yīng)該做的一件事。作者用自己的行動來告訴我們應(yīng)當如何節(jié)約用水，運用賓語從句，及when 引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句等知識點將文章寫得很連貫?！癐t is reported that...”用固定短語闡明信息來源，體現(xiàn)用詞的準確性，作者用自己的方式詮釋著節(jié)約用水的重要性，構(gòu)思獨特。

指導(dǎo)教師：楊純瑜