山東 李全忠

?情境呈現(xiàn)

假定你是Susan，你的朋友徐婷因?yàn)楦改冈谕獾毓ぷ?，總是在放學(xué)后感到孤單，向你寫(xiě)郵件尋求幫助。請(qǐng)你給她回一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1.表示安慰；

2.提出建議；

3.表達(dá)祝愿。

注意：

1.詞數(shù)80左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

【佳作賞析】

Date__Greeting Body___Close__Signature 10 September 2023 Dear Xu Ting,__________________________________________________________You wrote that you always feel lonely after school because your parents work in another city.I understand how you feel.It is common for teenagers to feel lonely when they live away from their parents.I think you can try joining a volunteer group that helps other people.This will give you a chance to meet and be around others.It will also help you realize that you are not alone in having problems and that many other people have problems, too.Helping other people also makes you feel better.You can also connect with your parents online.Your parents are far away,but it doesn't mean you can't talk to them.I'm sure that you'll make new friends and get a chance to speak to your parents more often.These will help drive away your loneliness.Best wishes!___________________________________________________________Susan_________________________________________________________________

?寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)

Step 1 文體感知

建議信是書(shū)信的一種形式，屬于應(yīng)用文。建議信是寫(xiě)信人向收信人就某事提出自己的建議或忠告，有可能是寫(xiě)給個(gè)人，就收信人遇到的某個(gè)問(wèn)題提出自己的看法和觀點(diǎn)；也可能是寫(xiě)給某個(gè)組織或機(jī)構(gòu)，就改進(jìn)其服務(wù)等方面提出建議。建議信的主要人稱(chēng)為第一、二人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。

Step 2 謀篇布局

____Date__Greeti_____ng Dear ________,_________________________________________________________Body___Close__Signature Paragraph 1: the purpose of the letter（點(diǎn)明寫(xiě)作目的：表示理解并就某事/問(wèn)題提出建議）____________Paragraph 2:the advice that you give（闡述具體建議，并說(shuō)明理由）Paragraph 3:the writer's hope（希望建議被采納并有所幫助）___________________

Step 3 高分模板

________(日期)

Dear ________,

I'm sorry that you are having trouble in ________(問(wèn)題).However, the situation is easy to change if you take my advice.Here are some tips to help you.

First(ly), why not ________(建議1)? If you do this, ________(原因1).Second(ly),you should/can ________(建議2).Then/That way, ________(原因2).Third(ly), it would be a good idea if ________(建議3).By doing this, ________(原因3).Last but not least,________(建議4).

I hope you will find these ideas useful.

Yours sincerely,

______

Step 4 語(yǔ)言組織

建議信開(kāi)篇常用句式：

1.Learning/Knowing that...,I'd like to give some useful suggestions.得知……，我想提供一些有用的建議。

2.I am writing to express my views concerning...我現(xiàn)在寫(xiě)信是想表達(dá)我對(duì)……的看法。

3.My suggestions are as follows.我的建議如下。

4.I'm sorry to hear that you are having trouble in making friends.Such problems are quite normal.我很遺憾聽(tīng)說(shuō)你在交朋友方面有困難。（出現(xiàn)）這樣的問(wèn)題是很正常的。

5.I have received your letter saying you plan to pay a visit to China for a week next month.Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful to you.我已經(jīng)收到了你的來(lái)信，信上說(shuō)你打算下個(gè)月來(lái)參觀中國(guó)一周?？赡芟旅娴慕ㄗh對(duì)你是有幫助的。

6.You have asked me for my advice on how to learn Chinese, and I will try to make some suggestions here.你就如何學(xué)習(xí)漢語(yǔ)詢(xún)問(wèn)我的建議，我試著在這給出一些建議。

7.I'm very glad to receive your e-mail.Now I'm writing to give you some advice on how to learn English well in high school.我很高興收到你的電子郵件?，F(xiàn)在，關(guān)于如何在高中學(xué)好英語(yǔ)，我寫(xiě)信給你提一些建議。

建議信主體部分常用句式：

1.Firstly,why not join a club? If you do this,you can make more friends.首先，為什么不參加一個(gè)俱樂(lè)部？你如果這樣做的話(huà)，會(huì)交到更多的朋友。

2.Secondly, you should try to talk with others.That way, you will feel more confident.其次，你應(yīng)該盡力與他人交談。這樣，你會(huì)感覺(jué)更加自信。

3.Thirdly,it would be a good idea to read a book or listen to music.By doing this,you will calm yourself down.第三，看書(shū)或聽(tīng)音樂(lè)將會(huì)是個(gè)不錯(cuò)的主意。這樣做的話(huà)，你就會(huì)使自己平靜下來(lái)。

4.Last but not least,you'd better talk with your parents first.最后但同等重要的是，你最好先和你的父母談一談。

5.As far as I am concerned/In my opinion, you should help each other.就我而言/在我看來(lái)，你們應(yīng)該互相幫助。

6.It's important to have a balanced diet.保持均衡飲食非常重要。

7.As time goes on, people will know you better and will like to make friends with you if you can follow the above advice.如果你遵從以上建議，隨著時(shí)間的推移，人們會(huì)更加了解你，并且愿意和你交朋友。

8.I'm sure if you take my advice,you will become slimmer and healthier.我堅(jiān)信，如果你采取我的建議，你會(huì)變得更加苗條，更加健康。

建議信結(jié)尾常用句式：

1.I hope you will find these suggestions helpful.我希望這些建議對(duì)你有幫助。

2.I hope my suggestions will be of some help.我希望我的建議能有所幫助。

3.I will appreciate it if you would consider my suggestion.如果您能考慮我的建議，我將不勝感激。

4.I believe that if you follow my advice,you'll get along well with your classmates.我相信，如果你聽(tīng)從我的建議，你會(huì)和同學(xué)們相處得很好。

建議信常用關(guān)聯(lián)詞：

to begin with,in addition,furthermore,finally（首先，另外，再者，最后）

first,second,besides,last but not least（首先，其次，此外，最后但同樣重要的是）

most important of all,moreover,finally（最重要的是，此外，最后）

for one thing,for another（一則，二則）

on the one hand,on the other hand（一方面，另一方面）

?即時(shí)訓(xùn)練

假定你是李華，你的留學(xué)生好友Jim 上周與他的朋友Stephen 之間產(chǎn)生了一些誤會(huì)，他寫(xiě)郵件告訴你他計(jì)劃與Stephen和好，希望你給出建議。請(qǐng)你給他回一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1.表示理解；

2.給出建議；

3.表達(dá)祝愿。

5 July 2023

Dear Jim,

___________________________________________________

___________________________________________________

___________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

?評(píng)價(jià)導(dǎo)思

√Are all the parts of a letter included and organized in a good order?

√Do you give reasons for the advice?

√Do you use proper expressions to give suggestions?

√Do you use commas(逗號(hào))and full stops correctly?

√Is the handwriting easy to read?