A Girl Who Looks like a Sunflower

I would like to tell you about a pretty（可愛(ài)的）girl who looks like a sunflower（向日葵）. Her friends gave her this beautiful nickname（昵稱）. The pretty girl is me—Anne.

Speaking of the source（來(lái)源）of the name, I guess that there are many reasons（原因）.

Firstly, I am a happy girl and I have a lot of pleasant（愉快的）things to share（分享）with my friends. My friends are always willing to hear my travelling（旅行的）experiences（經(jīng)歷）. Last holiday, I told them a funny story about a baby elephant who can dance along with music in Thailand（泰國(guó)）. I took lots of pictures to show the cute animal. Almost all of my friends laughed loudly（大聲地）when they saw these photos.

My friends have told me why they like getting along with me. They view me as a warm-hearted（熱心的）friend. When they face diffculties（困難）, I often give them a hand, such as teaching them some homework.

I have some good hobbies（愛(ài)好）that attract（吸引）my friends. It is a happy thing for them to hear how I study English and go diving（潛水）under the sea. And they learn some useful ways to speak English and memorize（記憶）words. When I talk about the underwater creatures（生物）, they would like to try this activity（活動(dòng)）.

I am Anne—a sunfower.

楊馮清予

云南師范大學(xué)附屬小學(xué) 五年級(jí)

指導(dǎo)老師：馮志恒

豆豆：在這篇作文中，小作者采用“總—分”的結(jié)構(gòu)，先開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山地點(diǎn)題，說(shuō)明自己就是“像向日葵一樣的女孩”，然后進(jìn)行分述，列出理由證明自己的觀點(diǎn)。文章條理清晰，描寫生動(dòng)，各種時(shí)態(tài)、從句的運(yùn)用也非常得當(dāng)，是一篇質(zhì)量很高的作品。