寇愛民 ? 男,河北省衡水市阜城縣古城中學一級教師、市優(yōu)秀教師、縣骨干英語教師,從事英語教學工作20余年,連續(xù)多年被評為優(yōu)秀教師。在省、市級以上期刊上發(fā)表多篇論文。曾輔導(dǎo)多名學生在國家級、省級英語競賽中獲獎。
My Favourite Sports
My favourite sport is table-tennis. I like it very much. And Im very good it at①. I think its good for my health.
Zhang Jike is my favourite table-tennis player. Hes excellent and has great skills. After class everyday②, I go to play table-tennis with my friends. They all like table-tennis, too. I want to be a good table-tennis player with③ Zhang Jike. I also like to play badminton. And④ I cant do well in it. Lin Dan is my favourite badminton player. Hes very famous in the world. He won the first place in the 29th and 30th Olympic Games.
河北省阜城縣古城中學九年級(3)班 ? 韓旭
1. 優(yōu)點:
本文語言流暢,表達清晰,用詞準確。第一段概括了自己最喜愛的運動及其好處。第二、三段具體描述了自己是如何喜愛這種運動的。兩個明星人物的出現(xiàn)無疑使文章錦上添花。全文結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹,層次分明,過渡自然。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① it at應(yīng)改為at it。因為at是介詞,賓語it要置于其后。
② everyday應(yīng)改為every day。everyday是形容詞,every day為表頻度的狀語。句中該部分應(yīng)為句子的狀語。
③ with應(yīng)改為like。介詞like,意為“像”。
④ And應(yīng)改為But。but表示意思上的轉(zhuǎn)折。
3. 評分:
按照中考英語作文滿分20分的標準,本文修改前可得17分。