李永航

Do you know Dalian？ I think Dalian is one of the most beautiful cities in China. Its hotter than my hometown in summer. There are many trees and mountains around the city. The people in Dalian are very friendly and the food is more expensive than my hometowns.

My favorite place is Xinghai park. It is said that its the biggest park in Asian. There are many kinds of birds in this park. And the large sea is very beautiful. Some people can swim in the sea， others can discover many interesting things on the beach， such as stones， fish... In my opinion， Dalian is not only a beautiful city， but also is a young city full of vitality. I love Dalian. Its the best place that I have ever been to.

簡評：從作文中能夠感受到學(xué)生對大連的喜愛。首先寫了對大連的整體感受，然后又寫了最喜歡的星海公園。具有較強的語言表達能力；行文連貫，表達清晰明了，可讀性強，但是如果能把對大連的感受具體分類，會更好。

（ 指導(dǎo)教師：董文平）