張 婷
學(xué)生習(xí)作(張婷 湖北省):
Sunny Saturday 2007, Oct. 3rd1
It is2 sunny and hot. I went to a beautiful place—Great Wall3 with my friends. We went there at 10:00 by a bus4. We had great fun playing on it. In the afternoon we comed5 back with happy heart(心情).
分析:本篇是以日記的形式記錄了有趣的假期,語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔,條理清晰,值得學(xué)習(xí),但仍有幾處錯(cuò)誤,請(qǐng)注意:
1. 英語(yǔ)日記中日期和天氣情況的位置和漢語(yǔ)不同。英語(yǔ)一般在左邊寫月,日,年和星期,用形容詞把天氣情況寫在右邊。
2. 英語(yǔ)中通常是記敘當(dāng)天發(fā)生過(guò)的事情,因此所用的時(shí)態(tài)一般是過(guò)去時(shí)。
3. “長(zhǎng)城”為專有名詞,在表達(dá)時(shí)前面要加the。
4. by+交通工具,其中交通工具前不加冠詞。
5. 此處錯(cuò)誤在于come的過(guò)去式?jīng)]有掌握。come屬于不規(guī)則變化,其過(guò)去式是 came。
Oct. 3rd, 2007, Saturday Sunny
It was sunny and hot, I went to a beautiful place—the Great Wall with my friends. We went there at 10:00 by bus. We had great fun playing on it. In the afternoon we came back with happy heart.
(指導(dǎo)老師:許淑芬)